Friday, July 11, 2014

Editing, Schmediting

SERVANT came back from the editor on Monday, and I've spent every day since then trying not to be disheartened by all the red marks with which my editor painted my document.



Every time I send off a novel or short story to be beta-read or edited, fear reaches out its knobby fingers and latches onto my heart. My chest tightens. I feel like I can't breathe right. What if they say my story sucks? What if it's so bad it can't be published and I have to start all over from the beginning?

I'm sure many authors have this fear. We want our work to be perfect but know it isn't. What is clear in our minds does not always translate to the page, which I have learned time and time again.

In SERVANT'S case, I understood my characters, but the editor found their motivations murky. She said they needed to be developed better. So far I've altered one scene to read from a different character's point of view, flip-flopped two scenes so they appear in a different order, wrote in some flashbacks so a relationship could be understood better, consulted a native Spanish speaker to check the correctness of a sentence, picked a different Bible verse for a passage at a wedding, and fixed what a character was doing since the editor said it was physically impossible for him to do it.

And that's not all, because I'm not finished combing through the document. When I'm done, I'll comb through it again to tweak things further, and then again after that. Then it gets sent back to the editor so she can look at all my changes.

[wipes sweat from brow]

The plus side? She said my writing is tight! (Which means I don't use excessive words.)

SERVANT should be coming very soon now. I can almost taste it. Can you?


Saturday, July 5, 2014

Waiting in the Dark


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SERVANT is coming!


But you probably knew that already.

On Thursday I spoke with a book formatting person on the phone for an hour and a half. Do you know how long it's been since I talked on the phone that long? About 7 years--I kid you not. I learned lots and lots of stuff during that hour and a half and even found out that said book formatting person is a huge Dean Koontz fan. (If you don't know, my discovery of Dean Koontz's novels completely changed the style and themes of my writing.)

Anyway--to further whet your appetite while we all await SERVANT'S unscheduled release, here's a snippet from Chapter 11, when Bobby Roland waits for Randy Bellison in the dark...

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He sat up and stared at the distant door of the unit Randy had disappeared through. The light still glowed behind drawn curtains. He hoped everything was okay in there. Randy had told him he’d be back, but it grew so late that he considered asking if Randy would be willing to stay there until morning.
            But Bobby wasn’t going to be the guy to interrupt their conversation.
            Or anything else that might be going on in there, for that matter.
            Ever the gentleman, he waited for Randy to emerge.
            Seconds turned into long minutes. It had to be two o’clock by now. Tomorrow he would be cleaning a church at this time of night. By himself. In a seedy part of town. Where people cut brake lines on cars and unseen beings tapped on the windows.
            As if on cue, a small object bounced off the windshield and rolled down the hood. Fear seized his heart for a second before he realized it was only an acorn that had fallen from one of the tree limbs hanging above the car.
            The night became still once more. He waited.
            A length of time passed. He shifted positions and gazed out the window again. The apartment lights were still on.
            He sighed.
            A speck of orange light inside the car to his left caught his eye as he went to lie down again. He squinted. It looked like the burning tip of a cigarette, but aside from that he couldn’t see anything within the vehicle.
            It would seem Bobby was not the only one waiting for something in the dim parking lot, and since nobody had entered or exited the other vehicle since Bobby arrived, the smoker must have lurked behind dark windows for the entire duration of Bobby’s wait.
            Creepy.
            He continued to watch the cigarette. Intuition told him the person smoking it was a man. What was he doing here? Casing the joint? Waiting for someone to meet him? Or was he just out here to smoke?
            Bobby held his finger over the automatic lock button, knowing he was probably overreacting. But he wasn’t in the best shape. Kids in school had made fun of him, calling him Knobby Bobby and Skinny Ninny and things like that, generally before he got slammed face first into a locker. If this guy wanted to break into his car and steal his wallet, Bobby wouldn’t be able to stop him without getting broken himself.
            He pushed the button. The sound of the locks engaging was as loud as a car backfiring in the quiet air.
            The cigarette went out.
            Bobby stopped breathing. Two eyes that he couldn’t see were likely staring in his direction.
            “Randy,” he whispered, “it would be great if you could get out of there so I can leave.”
            He supposed he could leave the car himself and take refuge inside the girlfriend’s apartment, but it would be rude to barge in on such a scene. The woman had tried to kill herself. She had to be messed up on something. Drugs, maybe. Normal, healthy people didn’t want to die. They wanted to—
            The voice of reason spoke inside his head. Get out of the car. Now.
            Bobby didn’t need to be told twice. He scrambled across to the passenger seat, made sure he had his keys and wallet, and dove out the door.

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Wednesday, June 25, 2014

No Good Deed Goes Unpunished


Have you ever been reprimanded for doing the right thing? Did it make you angry? In SERVANT, Bobby Roland knows this feeling all too well...

(Excerpt from Chapter 2 of SERVANT)



Many boys he knew dreamed of being firemen and astronauts when they grew up, but deep down, Bobby Roland had always wanted to be a superhero.
The plan was simple. He would have a secret lair and identity (unassuming musician) and devote the rest of his time to helping those in need. He would help old ladies cross the street. He would scare off bank robbers with his self-taught karate moves. He would be adored by the public and lauded a champion of the people in the newspapers, which would fly off the stands and be read by citizens the world over.
He had even come up with a name for himself: Rescue Man. Because that’s what he would do. Rescue people in whatever way necessary to ensure their protection.
Ah, the follies of childhood. If only he had known.
Bobby steered his way home through the driving rain, trying his best not to let his anger blind him to the perils of the wet road. The condemning words repeated themselves in his mind like a broken record. You’re fired. You’re fired. You’re fired.
Part of him wanted to cry. Part of him wanted to smash his fist into something soft and warm, preferably his former manager’s face. But he’d just stood there, numb, and listened to the man’s words like a truant schoolboy receiving a scolding from his principal.
Within his veins, however, his blood began to boil. He had only been doing the right thing. Rescue Man would have done the same, but Rescue Man did not exist.

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Thursday, June 19, 2014

SERVANT is coming! It has a cover now! And words!



(Okay, it already had words.)

Yes, SERVANT is coming soon. No, I don't know what day it will arrive at your favorite purveyor of books. The cover is finished, at least, and it's really, really cool. In fact, it's my favorite cover out of all my books. Bask in its beauty and awesomeness! BASK IN IT!!!

www.gobolddesigns.com

Now that your eyes have been sated, here's a sneak peek from this novel that took me so long to write. Watch out for flying pop cans.

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            Just as his tired mind began to wander off on some other tangent, something ticked against the window to the left of his bed. A bug, probably, or something kicked up by the wind. Funny, though. It kind of reminded him of that crazy sound he kept hearing earlier when—
            Tap. Tap-tap-tap.
            Bobby’s muscles froze. It was the same sound he’d heard in the church office. And what had Randy said? That whatever caused it was like a poltergeist. The sounds wouldn’t bother Bobby when Randy left his job at the church because Randy was the one whom the unnamed thugs were after. But now Bobby had associated with the man, and the beings—whatever they were—had followed him.
            Tap-tap. Tap.
            Of course Bobby was being silly. Poltergeists did not exist, and he certainly didn’t believe in ghosts. Randy had simply freaked him out with some kind of sound-throwing trick back at the church. Maybe the tapping hadn’t been on the window at all and was really something Randy himself was doing under the desk. Or had it been a recording? It was even possible that Randy owned a secondary vehicle and had followed Bobby home at a distance just to torment him further. Bobby could see no motive for such actions, but crazy people didn’t follow the same logic that others did.
            Bobby held his breath and continued listening for any indication that a solid, flesh-and-blood human stood outside the window. Aside from the tapping, all he heard was the soft sighing of wind in the trees.
            He waited five minutes before tiptoeing out of bed and peering through a gap in the drapes. The moon lit up the night with a pale milky glow, though the wind made patchy clouds scud across the sky at a fast clip that alternately dimmed and brightened the cratered orb. The brief periods of brightness weren’t enough. If someone lurked in the yard, he couldn’t see them.
            Tap. The sound, louder this time, originated from a more distant point. The creep had chosen another window and upgraded to small boulders instead of pebbles.
            “That’s it.” Bobby jammed his bare feet into gym shoes and pulled on a sweatshirt. If he didn’t stop the guy, he would break a window and then Bobby’s landlord would jack up the rent to astronomic proportions if he didn’t throw Bobby out for associating with the wrong crowd.
            Bobby owned no weapons. He did have a fireplace poker hanging in a stand by the hearth out in the living room. He had no intention of using it, but it might strike fear into the creep’s heart and make him run away.
            He crept out of his bedroom, slowly lifted the poker out of the stand so it wouldn’t make a clanging noise that would rouse Caleb, and undid the deadbolt on the back door.
            The porch light had burnt out some months before and neither of the house’s occupants had bothered replacing it, much to Bobby’s current regret. The moon disappeared behind a bank of fast-moving clouds again. He could have brought out a flashlight, but stealth might be in his favor if he could catch the guy by surprise.
            He made sure the door wouldn’t lock behind him and stepped onto the small cement slab where they kept the tiny charcoal grill they’d used maybe twice all summer. His eyes already adjusted to the darkness since he hadn’t turned on any lights during his short flight from the bedroom to here. He took quick inventory of the yard. Garbage cans. Stunted bushes. Chain-link fence. The creep didn’t have many places to hide, though it was possible he’d heard Bobby and dashed around to the side of the house to hunker down behind the giant pine tree that took up a good portion of the side yard.
            Anything was possible.
            Well, almost anything.
            He was about to step off the slab when something whizzed by his head and bounced off the lid of the grill before clattering to the ground.
            He wanted to whirl around and see what it had been, but if he turned his back, the creep might sneak up behind him and conk him on the head. He squinted. What direction had the thing come from? He didn’t see—
            Clunk. Another something landed at his feet. Keeping his gaze trained on the yard, Bobby stooped and found the object with his hand. He picked it up and held it in front of his face.
            The moon emerged briefly from behind the mantle of clouds.
            He held a crushed can of Dr Pepper. Not nearly as crushed as it would have been had it been in Caleb’s grip when that news bit about the murdered girl had been on television, but crushed nonetheless.
            Bobby remembered part of his exchange with Randy earlier in the evening.
It sounds like someone’s throwing rocks at the window.
            Rocks, sticks, whatever else they can find. I’m used to it.
            The Dr Pepper can had previously resided in one of the garbage cans along the back fence ten yards away, or more specifically, the “recycle” can sitting next to the one reserved for regular waste. Though Bobby didn’t see how a grown man could remain concealed behind the bins while launching such an assault, that’s where he had to be.
            Bobby squared his shoulders to make himself appear braver and marched across the damp grass, wielding the poker like a baseball bat. He stopped five feet away from the cans and cleared his throat. Maybe he could be diplomatic about this. “I know you’re back there,” he said, “and if you don’t want me to bash a hole in your head, you’ll come out with your hands up.” It sounded cheesy, but he didn’t have time to think of a more elaborate threat.
            He waited. Nothing moved. Maybe the guy was holding his breath.
            “Hello?” He took another tentative step forward. The lid of one can rested on the ground beside it. A few other crushed cans lay scattered in the grass.
            “I’ve got a fireplace poker,” he said.
            Nothing.
            “Do you know what a person can do with a fireplace poker?”
            He hoped that none of his neighbors would hear him and think he had flipped his lid.
            He continued anyway. “You don’t?” His voice shook. “Well, I’ll tell you. There’s this guy back home, you see. Lived with a crazy mama. She tried to kill him, but he killed her first with one of these things. He gives talks now. Stuff about forgiveness and moving on and things like that.” Now he was just rambling like a nutcase. “Do you want me to do that to you? Kill you with a poker like you’re a crazy mama?”
            He thought he heard a faint snicker somewhere in the night, but it might have just been the wind rustling through the grass and trees.
            Somehow the silence behind the garbage cans seemed far louder than all the nighttime sounds surrounding him. Gripping the poker in one hand, he dragged the recycle can aside with the other.
            Nobody was there.

Tuesday, June 10, 2014

Meet the Character: Randy Bellison

In last week's post I introduced you to the SERVANT character Bobby Roland, who is plagued with premonitions of disaster and wants to be a professional guitarist but isn't.

This week I'll introduce you to Randy Bellison, who has problems of an entirely different variety.

Randy is twenty-six years old but looks a good ten years older than that. He doesn't sleep much because when he isn't mopping floors at St. Paul's Church or spending time with Lupe, the woman he desires to marry, he's...

Well, if I told you, that would spoil the story, right?

Let's just say Randy practically walks around with a target on his back. One of his closest friends shot him in the shoulder and left him for dead before dropping off the face of the planet. Randy has since become so paranoid that he moved into a rundown house that practically looks abandoned so it won't ever look like anyone is home.

Crazy, huh?

But Randy wears cool shoes...

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And has a shirt that looks sort of like this...

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And wears a nifty watch, too!


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He has always lived here...
 
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And may or may not have someone shut inside his basement.

Randy is awesome. I wish he and I could sit down over drinks.
 
(Just an aside here: SERVANT'S cover is almost finished! And I have yet to hear back from the editor, so SERVANT still doesn't have a set release date. But it will be soon. SOON...)

Monday, June 2, 2014

SERVANT is coming soon!



So I've been dropping hints about my upcoming novel SERVANT for awhile. Like this:

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And this...

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And this...

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And this.

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Well, I'll give you even MORE hints.

SERVANT is about this wimpy guy named Bobby Roland who wants to be a professional guitarist but isn't.
 
Bobby knows things he shouldn't. In New York he told his neighbor not to go out one night because he would be hurt if he did. In Ohio he convinced his brother not to go to the movies so they wouldn't all die in an accident. And in Oregon he knows that if the man who interviewed him for his new job gets into his car and drives home, he will die.

How does Bobby know these things? Is he cursed? Is he just really good at guessing things? Does he have a crystal ball that helps him predict the future? Or is this ability of his something much more?

(Don't worry, Bobby doesn't know what's going on, either.)

Stay tuned, readers, for more sneak peeks, quotes, the cover reveal, and that elusive release date. In the meantime, hop on over to Pinterest to see more clues about what SERVANT has in store for you!


Friday, May 23, 2014

Meet the Author: S. R. Karfelt (and her books, too!)



Greetings, readers! I have a very special guest here today. Her name is Stephanie, but when she writes, we know her as S. R. Karfelt. (Believe me, I completely understand the whole alter ego thing.)

Karfelt pens novels from her home in the great State of New York. Her debut novel WARRIOR OF THE AGES released in 2013, and Book Number Two, BLANK, is now available from your favorite online retailers.

And now we'll let her have the floor.

So tell us a bit about yourself. How did you get into the business of writing? When did you first *know* you were a writer? 

Wife, Mother, High-Tech Industry Escapee, and I knew I wanted to write in first grade after my teacher read The Box Car Children out loud. Once they moved in with their grandfather – I realized it needed to be rewritten because all the fun stuff happened only when they were living on their own. After that I pretty much wanted to change every story I read, but finally settled for writing my own. 

Haha--I used to love the Box Car Children! Now I want to go back and read them again!

Anyway... 

I’ve heard that you take a hands-on approach to novel research. What’s the craziest thing you’ve ever done while conducting said research? 

Craziest is a matter of perspective, right? What would you say is crazier, hiking a forest alone at 3:00 a.m., skydiving, or eating insects? For me eating crickets was definitely nuts, but I really needed to experience these things in order to write about them. 

Eating insects would definitely rank high on the Crazy Scale.

BLANK is the second novel in the Warrior of the Ages series, and you have several more books planned for future release. What is the first thing you knew about this series of books? 

The idea for these books hit me when I was sick and at an engineering conference, the story just ticker-taped through my head (Times New Roman Font – 12 pt.). I couldn’t wait to start writing it down, which I did in pencil in notebooks at first. The thing that I knew for sure about these books was that I would finish writing them, I had to, and I reordered my life to do it. There are six of them by the way, it took me three years. This story owned me until I did. Weird fact: Two years after I started writing these I found a sketch pad from high school and there was a scene from these stories in them, so this one had been floating around in my head for quite some time.

Why is Kahtar from Warrior of the Ages so irresistibly sexy? 

Isn’t he? I think it is because he is the quintessential older man. He’s been around forever. The man has confidence and experience. He’s very capable and strong, but he’s also well aware of his own mistakes and short comings. For millennia he’d been soldiering onward by himself, unaware that he was in dire need of a soft place to fall.

What is BLANK about?   

Private Carole Blank was raised in foster care with no idea why she doesn’t fit into the world around her. Blank: A Shieldmaiden’s Voice is the story of a woman fighting tooth and nail for a place to belong, sentenced to the life of an assassin and denied the only thing she’s ever wanted – the heart of a man who is afraid of her.

So what exactly are the Covenant Keepers? 

Covenant Keepers are a group of people who made a covenant with ilu (God) after the fall of man, to atone. That is all I usually will say about them, because the details come out as necessary in subsequent books, but since you asked and you’re special, I’ll give you the scoop. They live in clans, mostly hidden from the rest of us, and they all follow the exact same ten laws with varying degrees of success. Perspective is a fascinating thing. It intrigues me that groups of people could follow the exact same rules with both utopian and dystopian results.

Do you have any writing quirks? 

I like to write in quiet, preferably at night, and when writing a first draft I won’t read any stories I haven’t read before – or watch movies/TV. I like to focus completely on the story and avoid outside influences.

If you were stranded on another planet, which three items would you want to have with you? 

Oxygen, shelter, and sustenance, but if those are already included, I’d like writing utensils, unlimited chocolate (for bartering purposes of course), and my electric blanket, Russell.

Have you ever tried to take over the world? 

That’s my husband’s job. I don’t want it, too much paperwork.

What is one of the most important things you’ve learned on your writing journey? 

This is what I love to do. It’s good to find your purpose.

What else would you like your readers to know?

Kahtar Constantine, Beth White, Honor Monroe, Welcome Palmer, and Carole Blank are some of the people I’d like readers to know. Trust me you won’t regret spending time with them. Love, honor, and purpose may seem like old-fashioned ideals, but when the chips are down, they’re really all human beings have.

Stephanie, thanks for dropping in! I loved the characters in WARRIOR OF THE AGES and I look forward to reading BLANK to see what they're up to.

And readers, be sure to check out the first chapter of BLANK at the following link:


And don't forget to visit S. R. Karfelt's websites:



And order Karfelt's books here!